Site looks so much better now. I agree with Pamela that you need more about me, previously was way too wordy with extraneous stuff, now you've cut too much. A few suggestions: Previously you mentioned you were in the Navy, it would be good to say that to tap into anyone military, but instead of the list of places you went to, just put "travelled worldwide taking pictures" or something like that. You make the photography in your bio sound like it is a family affair, but remember it is YOU who do the photography so talk about yourself. The picture you use of your family is a nice one, and that really tells the whole family story. They may travel with you but it is you who have the talent, so pump it up! You don't need to use the words "the purpose of this website" Use words like "the reason I...." or "my passion for...." Another suggestion is to have someone proofread when you have the revamp done. The sentences right now are very choppy, you need to have your words inspire lookers to want to see what your work is like, and choppy sentences don't do that.
Good job on the website revamp, happy haying ;-)
Shirley
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> --- In artshow_photo@yahoogroups.com, "Pamela J. Arquette" <pendragon@> wrote:
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> > Terri wrote, "Jake where is the bio?"
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> > I agree, I would like to see more information. As I said before the
> > customer likes to have it, it adds value to their piece. It is related to
> > branding.
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